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I found you broken,
Crumbled, laying upon the steps of life.
I wanted nothing more than to help you back up.
You had fallen from so high so long before.
I'd give my soul to carry you back up.
But no matter how hard I try,
I can't budge or lift you up till you decide,
To stand by yourself,
Change yourself.
And when you do, I swear I'll be back right here.

But do you mind,
If I,
Just sit and wait with you a while?
While we both have the time.
Just a little something that passed through my mind earlier. First attempt at free verse. Let me know if you enjoyed it :) Itd mean a lot!
(Thank you so much for all the comments and favorites! I never expected this kind of response :,) )
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poeknowsprose Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
This was really sweet and I liked it. Well done :)
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Nnaerb-dbz-fan Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
FANGIRLING MOMENT! I really really like this! It's just so beautiful!
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much :D
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Nnaerb-dbz-fan Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Not a problem :D I usually don't like non-rhymey poems but yours just... I don't know.... spoke to me? does that make sense? Sorry, I just really enjoyed it :D
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Jewel-Firefly Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
Lovely, short poem. It's so difficult to wait for someone who has to go through something, and you can't help them. It's heartbreaking.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
It really is. Its even harder when you have to decide whether you should wait for them even longer, or when its time to go on. Its a hard situation to be in
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Angel10000 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
nice.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
thank you
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Mimy22 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Wow this is great it flows nicely and feels very passionate well done
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much :)
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Mimy22 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013
It was my pleasure to read such a heart felt poem. I hope to see more from you. And as others have said, I completely understand both sides so just know that you have support
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pixiepearl Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconawwwplz:
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
awwwww!!
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curlscat Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Hey look you have the same lit tag as me.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thats awesome! :D
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kiba4802 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is a great poem :)
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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kiba4802 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you're welcome ^^
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absolutend Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Wow
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
:)
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minustwoseventhree Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Oh.
This reminds me so much of my ex.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
:hug:
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I really like this, I've been there, and still am , well done
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Feathered-Phantasm Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for this... the point of view it's told from speaks loud and clear a position I've been in, and am in so well...
So seriously, I thank you beyond all means for understanding and expressing it so beautifully
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much for your comment. It meant a lot! I hope things get better :hug:
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Feathered-Phantasm Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem~ :huggle:
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CodaBear48 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Artist
Very nice ^^ This really stood out to me.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks!
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VeRTiGo-P Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Interface Designer
And thank you for writing the words that I couldn't. :)
I didn't know this was your first time that you wrote free verse until you said it :hug:
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
aww Thank you so much! :hug:
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NessielaKee Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
This is beautiful
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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1MsDaVinci Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very good, it gave me a pause when I'm usually flying through pictures, but this time...well like I said...I really like it.

Peace & Love,
Old Hippy Lady
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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1MsDaVinci Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You deserve it..You're very good with putting your thoughts into words, and it takes a certain something, in order to do that.
CARRY ON !!!!!!!!!!!!!

Peace & Loved,
Old Hippy Lady
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lenoueveo Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Love this, I have been there so many times on both sides
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks! :hug:
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shadowrikkunight Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist
that poem reminds me of a special someone :)
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
:)
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authorofthings Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
i really like this :) and hope it gets better for this person if it's based on real life
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks! I hope it gets better for them too
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Sakura-no-Josei Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I felt this this:
Ahhhhhh don't give up when they need you. But then I read the last part, and it was sweet. You tricked me. lol.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
lol Thanks :D
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Sakura-no-Josei Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
np
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HMart Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Professional General Artist
so amazing i liked alot
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks!
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ValerieCFrechmann Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I liked it. It's different from a lot of poetry out there.
Nice work.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much :)
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Kyndsie Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The content of this really made me stop, and think, and breathe, and have a moment to rest. And to be thankful. So thank you!
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