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I found you broken,
Crumbled, laying upon the steps of life.
I wanted nothing more than to help you back up.
You had fallen from so high so long before.
I'd give my soul to carry you back up.
But no matter how hard I try,
I can't budge or lift you up till you decide,
To stand by yourself,
Change yourself.
And when you do, I swear I'll be back right here.

But do you mind,
If I,
Just sit and wait with you a while?
While we both have the time.
Just a little something that passed through my mind earlier. First attempt at free verse. Let me know if you enjoyed it :) Itd mean a lot!
(Thank you so much for all the comments and favorites! I never expected this kind of response :,) )
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poeknowsprose Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
This was really sweet and I liked it. Well done :)
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Nnaerb-dbz-fan Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
FANGIRLING MOMENT! I really really like this! It's just so beautiful!
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much :D
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Nnaerb-dbz-fan Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Not a problem :D I usually don't like non-rhymey poems but yours just... I don't know.... spoke to me? does that make sense? Sorry, I just really enjoyed it :D
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Jewel-Firefly Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely, short poem. It's so difficult to wait for someone who has to go through something, and you can't help them. It's heartbreaking.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
It really is. Its even harder when you have to decide whether you should wait for them even longer, or when its time to go on. Its a hard situation to be in
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Angel10000 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
nice.
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
thank you
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Mimy22 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Wow this is great it flows nicely and feels very passionate well done
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singmyheartout4you Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much :)
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